Article found here: http://www.believermag.com/issues/201303/?read=article_straight
Susan Straight’s article, "November 24, 1963", explores the life and death of her brother as
well as what he “left behind.” The entire piece works as a reflection on Straight’s
relationship with her brother and his relationship with life. Straight uses
syntax, detail, and imagery to convey a nostalgic and unsure tone relative to
her brother’s death and her feelings.
Straight’s tone throughout "November 24, 1963" holds an uncertainty about her feelings relative
to things happening around her. The issue that is most clear is how she feels
about her brother, but she uses questions a few times to convey her confusion with
her own emotions. At one point, she sits with her mother as her mother cries
over President Kennedy’s assassination, but she questions why she is really
sitting with her mother: “to comfort her? to calm myself” (Straight). The questions are set off within
the sentence, displaying how unclear it really is to her. As the piece continues, Straight uses questions to display a lack ofguidance without her brother. Later Straight asks, “was
he coming here” when speaking of the night her brother died from crashing into
a tree (Straight). The question conveys guilt over the death of
her brother, but does not show confusion in her love and loss for her brother.
The nostalgic tone in the piece is displayed as she talks
about her time with her brother as a child, not only because of the
description, but also because of the hurried nature of the sentence: “the harsh
wind coming over the hills from the desert, the hawks overhead, coyotes
watching us from a distance while we dug” (Straight). The lack of conjunctions
between the activities makes the sentence feel quicker and more poetic. The
reader feels the things happening all at once. On top of the memories, just the
use of the past tense throughout the entire piece makes the reader feel the nostalgia.
Straight rarely uses the present tense, so the past tense feels almost normal
for the reader and at times conveys the message more clearly: “like who we were—crazy
white-trash inland Californians” (Straight). The reader understands there is
change because of the use of the past tense here and also is forced to wait for
the punch line of the sentence with the pause.
The nostalgia is further conveyed in the specific things that
Straight chooses to tell the reader, like when she talks about her mother
teaching her to knit she says, “she taught me to knit as she had learned in
Switzerland, hand-rolling the yarn around pieces of shiny hard candy.” The reference
to her mother being from a different country conveys to the reader that
Straight and her brother had to understand culture on their own. Then including
how she learned to knit, with candy,
reinforces the reoccurring happy thoughts in relation to past events with her brother.
This is one of the only times she brings in happy details surrounding her
brother’s birth, which reinforces its importance. Immediately after mentioning
the knitting, she mentions all the half siblings and step siblings she has, but
makes sure to mention Jeff, the brother the article is about, is her only full
blooded brother (Straight). These details show how important her brother was to
her and how much his death affected her.
Later Straight tells the reader that Jeff also left her “five
pieces of orange firewood” that she had not used before he died (Straight). She
then goes on to explain that she has not used the firewood in the ten years
since her brother’s death and that she “vacuum[s] up the spiderwebs [sic]” from
the firewood :at the end of the winter” (Straight). Bringing up spider webs
growing on the wood shows how long it has been since her brother dies and how
long she has kept the firewood.
When she finally gets into the tree her brother left her,
she tells the reader that, “the last flowers fall just before [Jeff’s] birthday”
(Straight). The reader is constantly reminded of Jeff, so the subject of the
piece is not lost. The article is not meant to just show how Straight feels
about her brother’s death, it is trying to convey what her brother is like.
Her lack of control over her brother is referred to several
times throughout the piece, but when he dies, she chooses to tell the reader
that “we were at basketball practice in the junior-high down the street”
(Straight). This is a strong testament to how little control she had over her
brother, because she was only a “down the street” from her brother and she was
not able to help him. It also touches on the guilt she displays when she
thought he was coming to see her.
Straight also uses imagery and sometimes lack of it to
display the control issues Straight has as well as the nostalgic tone. The only
time Straight physically describes Jeff, she describes him relative to herself
by telling the reader they share “eyes the color of year-old jeans” (Straight).
“Year-old” jeans bring comfort and the past to mind for the reader and set up a
sentimental mood. It makes Jeff seem like a kind and comforting person, while
still displaying the tone of Straight. At times, Straight uses very little
description or imagery to describe her feelings. For instance, she simply says,
“I’m so sad” when she talks about repainting her house after her brother dies
(straight). This lack of imagery, which she uses several times to convey her
relationship to her brother, shows how self-aware she is of her feelings for
her brother in that moment. She is simply sad and that is that; there are no
words to hide behind here and she does not need any. This is the start of her
certainty of her feelings and really only comes at the end of the article.
Imagery, detail, and syntax all add to the feeling of
nostalgia as well as the uncertainty, that eventually leads to more
understanding for Straight.
Hi Lindsay, I thought your made some great points about how the syntax and details play into the overall feeling of nostalgia. The connection you made about the spider webs in the fireplace showing how much time has passed was interesting too. One thing I would have to disagree with you on is the overall feeling of uncertainty. When I read the story, I only felt the sense of uncertainty at the beginning when her brother was not born yet. I think Straight uses the questions at the beginning to show how she lacked guidance without him (with her dad out of the picture and her mom very distressed), and how he gave her that guidance and took care of her in situations such as the one where her car got sideswiped. I think that for most of the piece the narrator seems sure of herself and her feelings about her brother and in general, and its all because he was there to help her through life, and continued to do so after he was gone through the presence of the tree and the chicken and everything else he left behind for her.
ReplyDeleteFirst off, this was very well-written for many of the reasons that Sydney mentioned. But I must agree with Sydney regarding the uncertainty aspect. You even almost contradict your earlier point in your last body paragraph when you give an example that "shows how self-aware she is of her feelings for her brother". At the very beginning of your post you mention that the piece "holds an uncertainty about her feelings relative to things happening around her" but the example you use to highlight the nostalgic tone and control issues is in conflict with the earlier assertion. You also reference how the author feels about her brother without actually ever mentioning how the author feels about her brother. In most cases, being specific about that would probably strengthen your points. But other than those two things, the second being only a minor grievance of mine, this is a very well-written response.
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