Sunday, September 22, 2013

Open Prompt (9/22)

2004. Critic Roland Barthes has said, Literature is the question minus the answer.” Choose a novel, or play, and, considering Barthes observation, write an essay in which you analyze a central question the work raises and the extent to which it offers answers. Explain how the author’s treatment of this question affects your understanding of the work as a whole. Avoid mere plot summary.

Essay N achieves the first objective of sticking to a thesis that falls under the prompt well, with one central question that the novel discussed, Candide, addresses. The writer maintains the focus and gives evidence as they bring in key parts of the book and then go on to explain them with clear ideas. Breaking the question into parts is key to the structure of the essay and understanding of the ideas and flow. Breaking up how the question was addressed and then the authors’ intentions made the piece easy to follow and also clearly showed the answer to the prompt without having too much separation between ideas. The continued restating of “tending our garden” seemed unnecessary and took away from the explanation. If the writer just mentioned it once, or even broken the quote down so that they were talking about each word separately, the essay and explanation would have better flow and be less redundant. The only issues that took away were some uses of punctuation, like the almost random exclamation mark, and some word choices. Still, the final paragraph is able to reaffirm the whole essay’s message as well as display that the main question in Candide is both answered and unanswered without making it seem like the writer was trying to get out of the question and frustrate the reader.

Essay J does set up the essay to follow the prompt and go more in depth, but the essay reads more like a summary than an explanation for the question “What is freedom”. The essay does show that Huck and Jim may still be left with societal “restrictions” in the end which displays that they may not have any freedom at all. Still, the analysis of the intentions of the author or how the intentions were portrayed was not explored and the essay fell short of a deep analysis of the answer to the question. In the end, the writer devotes a whole new paragraph to another question: “was Huck’s and Jim’s trip a success”. Bringing in a whole new question here only sidetracks from the main point and is space that could be used to further investigate the original question. There are a few word choices that also distract from main points such as “ourselves” when the writer should focus on the effects on society, not personally. Overall, the essay manages to give a surface explanation of the prompt, but does not go in deep enough or explain enough to sufficiently address the prompt.

Essay U fails to address the prompt with a specific issue that is maintained in the novel, Things Fall Apart. The essay brings up major issues in the novel like the fight for dominance between contemporary and traditional values, but a clear position on how the author displays this issue is not reached. Where specific events could be cited, the writer simply says “certain events” and leaves the reader to guess which events they are. The descriptions of the novel are general and the specific examples are nonexistent. The overall subject of the essay answers the prompt, but there is no proof. If the writer had used specific examples and analyses to defend and prove their thesis, the essay would have worked very well and fulfilled the prompt. There were also some distracting uses of tense in the piece, with switches between the present and past tense when talking about events in the novel.  The essay could have met the prompt well, but it was too general and failed to have specifics needed for evidence.



2 comments:

  1. Lindsay, I agree with you that some of the punctuation took away from essay N. The random exclamation distracted me too. I agree for the most part with you that the writer sticks to the thesis, but I do think he or she gets distracted at some points. I think the comment about the message being Christ-like, although interesting is irrelevant to the thesis and distracting. Do you agree or do you think it adds to the essay?

    Essay J definitely felt like a summary. I like what you said about the writer asking a whole new question regarding the success of Huck and Jim's trip distracting from the thesis. I think that the ending where the writer talks about how the book is "truly a novel of the U.S." was also distracting and not relevant to the thesis. In general the student could have kept in mind the fact that the reader of the essay will have read the novel they are referring to, and they don't need to add so many details about the plot of the book. They were not as direct as they could have been.

    I agree that essay U lacks significantly in evidence, but I would have to disagree with your claim that "the overall subject of the essay answers the prompt." I think that the writer simply states a question that the author asks, and then continues to summarize the plot of the play without saying how the author addresses the question.

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  2. I thought that these were all very good analytic responses to the essays. The only flaw I noticed in the entire post was the use of the word "flown" in the first body paragraph (incorrect use of the past tense for the word flow). But the actual analysis was spot on. I think you did an especially good of explaining why Essay J doesn't completely fulfill the goals of the prompt. It's important to actually give insight and analyze on the prompt not just summarize and you explained why the essay fails to do that very well.

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